Hi, I'll be reviewing this article against the GA criteria. I'll start at the beginning and leave comments as I go along...
Darby originated from one of several low pressure areas that developed in the Eastern Pacific during July 2016 - Perhaps somewhat pedantic, but I think it's pretty much a given that several low pressure areas will form in the EPAC during the month of July. I don't think this provides any information that couldn't be boiled down to "Darby originated from a low pressure area that formed at/near/off <location>".
A stream in Kalihi overflowed a nearby bridge and also inundated several upstream properties. - This line could be reworked a bit. "Overflowed" is a weak choice of words (surpassed? topped?), and one would think the flooding was downstream, not up.
Despite the widespread flooding, there was no loss of life during the passage of Tropical Storm Darby. - The flooding discussed seems to be of a very minor nature, so I think think it's surprising ("despite") that no deaths occurred.
Overall, it looks solid and seems to meet most of the GA criteria. Just a few minor suggestions for improvements. Placing the nomination on-hold for now, but I anticipate passing the article very soon. Nice work! – Juliancolton |
Talk03:40, 19 February 2017 (UTC)reply
Looks great - I feel comfortably passing the article now. Congrats! My one additional comment would be to briefly explain (or link, if appropriate) "brown water advisory," which I've never heard of until just now. I can guess its purpose, but still, seems like a rather obscure advisory. – Juliancolton |
Talk21:10, 24 February 2017 (UTC)reply