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Touched the article up where specified. Also added sourcing for the intro (and mentioned that this was on record when recording began) and added more info to the article and finally did a spell checking.
Jake52My talk21:30, 11 February 2007 (UTC)reply
{{Cite web}} formatting would be a great improvement for the article. Try going through the NHC discussions for more info. Also, give it another read-through. There are a lot of phrases that aren't well-written - "pulled itself together", "Dvorak numbers suggested that", "started life", "While turning northward and starting slow movement towards Mexico on May 27, a rugged banding eye feature became apparent on satellite imagery and convection around this eye feature began to deepen and the decision was made that Adolph had reached hurricane strength on the same day, but after coming within roughly 165 miles of the Mexican coastline the next day-the closest approach to land that the hurricane would make-Adolph began a left turn, influenced by a mid-tropospheric ridge" (quite a runon), "part of its life", "after all was said and done", "After the bout", and "Adolph's bad luck". Perhaps consider combining the preparations and impact section with the records section to form "Impact, records, and naming". Use more active and direct voice in verbs by avoiding phrases like had become or was predicted. Another image couldn't hurt. Finally, I'm not sure it should be said that the hurricane was retired. The name was removed, not retired. Retirement is generally reserved for storms due to damage.
Hurricanehink (
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23:30, 11 February 2007 (UTC)reply
(Concerning the picture)What would be a decent addition? Right now, the available pictures are mostly satellite images of the storm. Aside from those, the only other image Google brings up is a rainfall distribution 3D image like the current one, but with only half the storm's rainfall showing. As far as the tone and the cite-web go, I've got those covered.
Jake52My talk00:01, 12 February 2007 (UTC)reply
I gave the article a few goes-around and fixed the tone in the places indicated as well as fixed sourcing and info. I also corrected some spelling mistakes in the article. What else is needed for B-Class?
Jake52My talk22:00, 14 February 2007 (UTC)reply
I did a copyedit, and some things could use more explaining. What conditions were favorable for development? Why did it turn to the north? Why did it intensify so rapidly? More lede would be good, as well. Try adding more from NHC discussions. All in all, pretty close to B class.
Hurricanehink (
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22:48, 14 February 2007 (UTC)reply
How much more info does this article need before it reaches B-Class? I think I'm milked nearly all available information relevant from the discussions.
Jake52My talk07:09, 17 February 2007 (UTC)reply
That may be the hardest part. Nearly all stories pertaining to Adolph (CNN, Yahoo, etc.) were purged with age. The only Spanish article I found on Adolph is the one being sourced. I'm not sure if this article is even close to meeting the GA Criteria, but I'll try to dig up something (anything) on impact.
Jake52My talk10:01, 18 February 2007 (UTC)reply
I don't understand your last sentence, but I agree about the name. It was retired, so it should, bu convention, be moved. However, one could argue that it was retired for political reasons rather than damages, and thus does not justify the main article. –
JuliancoltonTropicalCyclone15:07, 19 September 2008 (UTC)reply
FTR, it's page 89
[1] although it is hard to ascribe the retirement to this Adolph. It just happened to be the first time someone noticed and took offense to it.
Potapych (
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01:44, 20 September 2008 (UTC)reply
The reason why someone took offence in 2001 is obvious enough: The occurrence of "Israel" later in the list. Retired storms get the primary name, due to their impact, not because the name was retired. Names here mirror the WMO's decisions on retirement, because "should this storm be retired?" and "should this storm get the main article?" depend on the same information (the impact of the storm). However, that is not the case with this storm. Of the 4 Adolphs: 1983's had some effect on land, 1989's was a do-nothing tropical storm, 1995's posed a serious threat to land at one point and the same was true in 2001. The 2001 storm is the most notable of the 4 IMO (minor land effects plus records), but it is not significantly more important than either the '83 or '95 storm. Given that its probably best to keep the dab at
Hurricane Adolph, whether it was technically retired or not.--
Nilfanion (
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11:34, 20 September 2008 (UTC)reply
Why the nitpicking about causes of Adolph's retirement? It shouldn't matter if the cause of the retirement was due to an Adolph's seasoning plant offshore Mexico being destroyed by the storm, or Adolph becoming the name of the new director of the WMO. If there was only one Hurricane Adolph, name it Hurricane Adolph, without the year. Do we really want to nitpick to the point of turning more people off to this project?
Thegreatdr (
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14:23, 20 September 2008 (UTC)reply
Well, we know why it was removed, and that's why we're nitpicking over the name. We reserve storms having the main article for storms that were retired due to damage, and we know this isn't the case. ♬♩
Hurricanehink (
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14:31, 20 September 2008 (UTC)reply
I thought it was merely due to retirement, not the cause of the retirement (the main TC project page does not indicate cause, or for that matter that we definitely leave the year out for retired storms, it just says MAY.) Technically, tropical cyclone names were not systematically retired through the WMO until the 1980s. We would have had a 1982 Agnes, had the list not changed to include male names in 1979.
Thegreatdr (
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14:34, 20 September 2008 (UTC)reply
Well, a quick thought on that. In the Atlantic, we know the name Carol retired for its name in 1954, even though it wasn't officially retired until after its usage in 1965. I believe it is the cause of the retirement which is important, since otherwise we'd be considering the 1965 fish storm Category 2 to have been retired. How does that relate to Adolph? I dunno, I feel that retirement is more meant for the damaging storms, and not just for the names that are removed. ♬♩
Hurricanehink (
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15:06, 20 September 2008 (UTC)reply
Retirement is not the same as article title in any case. Basically, main article =
primary subject. If someone in 2015 looks for "Hurricane Katrina" what storm are they most likely to be after info on? How about "Hurricane Carol"? How about "Hurricane Irene"? Or "Hurricane Adolph"? The first two have obvious answers. They may want the 1999 Irene, but who knows what will happen in 2011? As for Adolph, this is the most likely one but by nothing like the same clear cut margin. The guideline is not a rule that cannot be broken. The "retirement clause" on the project page is to deal with instances like the Irenes, not the Adolphs - Irene '99 is the most notable one but it is still on the lists; so may be usurped at some point.
I think that Adolph was formally retired as a name as opposed to 'removed from the list'. However to quote the WP guideline above: "If there is extended discussion about which article truly is the primary topic, that may be a sign that there is in fact no primary topic, and that the disambiguation page should be located at the plain title with no "(disambiguation)". I think that is the situation here.--
Nilfanion (
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18:04, 20 September 2008 (UTC)reply
If it is decided that only retired tropical cyclone names which cause significant damage get the main article, then storms like Diana (which was not retired due to the 1990 storm), and Klaus (which was not retired due to the 1990 storm) need to be renamed appropriately and get the same treatment you are suggesting for Adolph. Their 1984 versions were more destructive. I'm not trying to be difficult...I'm just acting as a sanity check regarding naming. We should be consistent through the project.
Thegreatdr (
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19:49, 20 September 2008 (UTC)reply
Whoa, wait a sec. How are you saying the 1990 Diana and Klaus were not retired for their 1990 storms? I thought Mexico requested Diana due to the 100+ death toll, and Martinique due to heavy damage on the island. ♬♩
Hurricanehink (
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20:02, 20 September 2008 (UTC)reply
The post-storm report for Klaus 1990 says nothing about Martinique, although the annual article does say it rained there and 7 deaths occurred (7 deaths from a minor hurricane causing name retirement?) The 1984 Klaus caused a bit more damage because NHC didn't write advisories on the system until after it passed by Puerto Rico/Leeward Islands (oops.) Diana of 1990 does show 96 deaths from the post storm report and annual article for Mexico, so what you said about Diana sounds plausible. The NOAA page does imply what you said about both, but it's hard to believe Klaus was retired due to effects from the 1990 system.
And what about Frances in 2004? The country of France had asked for Frances to be retired, even before the storm name was used, apparently for the same reasons Israel and Adolph were removed from the EastPac list. This whole retirement of hurricane names seems to get more confusing by the decade.
Thegreatdr (
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20:23, 20 September 2008 (UTC)reply
NOAA confirms about Diana/Klaus and Mexico/Martinique (and also Carol in 54). The site also links Frances' retirement with Florida. I think that is a major difference between Adolph, which we know was removed solely because of the name. ♬♩
Hurricanehink (
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22:32, 20 September 2008 (UTC)reply
I just searched up on Hazel, Knut (and Adele and Iva, although they weren't mentioned). I didn't find anything about retirement for them. I did find that Hazel killed a few fishers in Mexico, Adele had no hits, I found nothing for Knut, and the context of the only relevant Iva hit made it clear that it was a mispelling of Hurricane Iwa. I wasn't able to draw any conclusions about why they were retired. However, it does seem that EPac hurricane naming history is just plain knuts.
Miss Madeline |
Talk to Madeline05:45, 3 October 2008 (UTC)reply
Ignoring their damage, It is considered retired on this link.
[2]
Hurricane Adolph was a rare Category 4 hurricane in May. — lacking completely in context, making the lede
not clear . Category 4 on what scale? May of what year?
The first depression of the season formed May 25 and became a hurricane three days later. — more lack of context. Is Adolph the first storm of the season? (Yes, I know it is, but a layman reader will not.) I'd rephrase to "Adolph was the first tropical depression of the year, and formed on May 25; three days later, it had already become a hurricane" or something similar. Also, this is an example of the
standard, dry, boring, canned boilerplate explicitly discouraged in tropical cyclone article writing guidance.
Done
After rapidly intensifying, Adolph became the most powerful storm in terms of wind speed this season, along with Hurricane Juliette. — link to
maximum sustained wind; the last part of the sentence (the mention of Juliette) seems rather brief, and you also did not even mention what speeds Adolph attained, or when it did so.
Done
It dissipated on June 1. — This sentence is really brief; please expand it.
Done
Despite only briefly threatening land, the name was later removed from use. — Why? It seems much more appropriate to mention that Adolph was retired due to political pressure here than it currently is, in the next sentence.
Done
Adolph was noteworthy for being the first and so far the only East Pacific hurricane in May to reach Category 4 strength since record keeping began in the East Pacific — WHY is this buried so deep in the lede? This is the storms primary claim of notability, and placing it here is a severe lack of organization in the most critical portion of the article.
On May 7, a tropical wave left the coast of Africa. — jargon; link to
tropical wave
Done
The low entered the Pacific Ocean on May 22, and Dvorak classifications began two days later. — you are relying too much on supporting articles to support the text. It would not hurt anyone to say what Dvorak classifications are used for, such as saying "Dvorak classifications—satellite-based intensity estimates—began two days later." Otherwise, the flow of text is disrupted too much.
Done
The newly formed depression moved very slowly due to weak steering currents aloft — newly-formed. This should be hyphenated.
Done
resulting in an a typical track towards the east-northeast. — is it a typical track? An atypical track? What makes a track typical or atypical? According to whom it was typical or atypical? What is this sentence even trying to say?
Done
Because of these weak steering conditions, the computer models used to predict the movement of the depression varied greatly, with one predicting an eventual Mexican landfall. —
computer model is a poor link to use, when you have both
tropical cyclone forecast model and
tropical cyclone track forecasting available as better links.
Done
Located in conditions ideal for tropical development, it formed a central dense overcast, a large area of deep convection. — unclear antecedent for "it". Is it the depression? A computer model? The Mexican landfall? (Yes, only one of those makes sense, but spell it out in the article.)
Done
Adolph was in a low wind shear environment with warm sea surface temperatures and as such, the NHC forecasted. — the NHC forecasted what? Fluffy bunnies falling out of the sky? You're missing half of the sentence here.
Adolph turned northward on May 27, a turn influenced by a mid-level ridge building to the east and southeast,[8], thus causing the tropical storm to approach Mexico. — double comma around the reference
The high upper oceanic heat content, good outflow, and lack of vertical shear[9] allowed the hurricane to begin a burst of rapid intensification, dropping 1.46 mbars per hour. [2] — watch your reference spacing at the end of the sentence; its also upper-oceanic.
Done
While reducing in size, [9] Adolph reached its peak strength of 145 mph (230 km/h) on August 29.[3] — more ref spacing issues with ref 9
Done
Dvorak classifications reported a T-number of 7.0 to this hurricane, equivalent to a low-end Category 5 hurricane on the Saffir-Simpson Hurricane Scale.[2] — "reported a T-number of 7.0 to this hurricane" sounds wrong, particularly "to".
Done
Impact, Records and Naming
First off, fix the headers' capitalization per
WP:MOSHEAD
Done
… its close approach to land as well as its slow, unpredictable movement[14] resulted in the issuance of a tropical storm warning and hurricane watch for southern Mexico — missing "a" before hurricane watch; and why is one linked and not the other?
Done
Coincidentally, the previous record holder for strongest May hurricane, in 1983 with 110 mph (175 km/h) winds, was also named "Adolph".[2] — is there a link to this article? Why is "Adolph" in quotation marks?
In fact, the President of the WMO Regional Association IV-which monitors this basin-consulted committee members during the season and removed Israel as a consensus — the way you are using the dashes there, they should be em dashes (—) not en dashes (-)
Why does the first MODIS picture matter? The caption does not indicate the development stage of the storm at the point of the snapshot. Also, link MODIS to an appropriate page
While not explicitly set out in the GA criteria, you are supposed to alternate pictures left and right, set them all to the left, or set them all to the right, per
WP:MOSIMAGES. You are not doing any of them at this point.
Most of my complaints have to do with prose and referencing issues, with some minimal image issues. However, the first two criteria—in particular the second—force me to put the article on hold until the issues are rectified.
Titoxd(
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I see you addressed most of the issues I noticed (particularly the referencing ones, which were the most urgent), and I did a few other assorted fixes for you. Passed.
Titoxd(
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