"the tenth episode The Simpsons' thirteenth season." missing word
"was pitched by seres' co-creator and executive producer" typo
"tensions among The Simpsons' staff" apostrophe not needed
"some of who conidered it" typo
Make sure first mentions of Lenny and Springfield are wikilinked
"All cacti resemble Marge to Homer, and Lenny mournfully points out Mount Carlmore that he carved one blissful summer." Not sure I understand the second part of this sentence. Lenny carved Mount Carlmore?
"Meanwhile, Marge leaves Artie furiously, only to discover what Homer had done when she gets home and finds he is not there and that he had left a tape behind." You can probably delete the second part of this sentence (bolded). Or reword (verging on run-on sentence currently)
"and anti-Homer subliminal messages (though Artie seems to reveal himself soon after the messages start and wakes up Marge)." Don't quite understand this sentence either. How does Artie reveal himself?
Indicate Tim Long is a consulting producer
" This revalation garnered scrutiny" typo
Make sure sentences with direct quotes end with citations
""Half-Decent Proposal" features the return of Artie Ziff, and the first time since the season 2 episode "The Way We Was" that the character was portrayed by American comedian Jon Lovitz." awkward phrasing
"On August 24, 2010, the episode was released part of The Simpsons: The Complete Thirteenth Season DVD and Blu-ray set. Al Jean, Ian Maxtone-Graham, Matt Selman, Tim Long, Dan Castellaneta, Lauren MacMullan, Matt Warburton and James Lipton participated in the audio commentary of the episode." Needs citation (just use audio commentary citations here too)
"manages to be worse that that dire movie [Indecent Proposal]." typo on your part, or author's? (maybe add [sic]?)
"calling the it "late to the party." missing word
"The Simpsons makes an Indecent Proposal themed episode" make sure The Simpsons and Indecent Proposal are italicized
Format publishers considently (use IGN for instance, not tv.ign.com)
The article is well-researched and interesting, but has a lot of grammar mistakes. They're mostly all easy fixes, so I'll place the review on hold for seven days while they are addressed. Thanks,
Ruby2010comment!16:18, 1 June 2011 (UTC)reply
Looks good. Almost forgot, but make sure to add a brief ratings summary to lead. Then it will be all set for gaining a GA ranking. Thanks,
Ruby2010comment!17:21, 1 June 2011 (UTC)reply