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Reviewer: The Rambling Man ( talk · contribs) 19:09, 24 July 2013 (UTC) reply

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• "Sandusky, Ohio" why not just leave the pure wikilink to Sandusky, Ohio?
  • Done.-- Astros4477 ( Talk) 18:50, 27 July 2013 (UTC) reply
• Lead para has a few choppy very short sentences, consider merging a couple to improve the flow.
  • Fixed.-- Astros4477 ( Talk) 19:20, 27 July 2013 (UTC) reply
• Again, as always in these articles, find links for jargon link "inversions".
  • What do you mean?-- Astros4477 ( Talk) 19:15, 27 July 2013 (UTC) reply
    • Where you use jargon terms like "inversions", try to find suitable wikilinks so non-expert readers like me can understand exactly what is meant. The Rambling Man ( talk) 09:03, 28 July 2013 (UTC) reply
      • There's no other links than you can replace Inversion with. Atleast I couldn't find any.-- Astros4477 ( Talk) 01:30, 29 July 2013 (UTC) reply
        • Like Roller coaster inversion? The Rambling Man ( talk) 17:46, 31 July 2013 (UTC) reply
          • Done Themeparkgc   Talk  04:14, 1 August 2013 (UTC) reply
• "The new ride replaced" you mean "Gatekeeper replaced...
  • Fixed.-- Astros4477 ( Talk) 19:14, 27 July 2013 (UTC) reply
• "and raised Cedar Point's quantity of roller coasters to 16." how? They demolished one roller coaster and a gyro tower, and built one roller coaster.
  • Slightly reworded.-- Astros4477 ( Talk) 18:58, 27 July 2013 (UTC) reply
• Order of lead is odd too, you mention the start of construction 2/3 of the way through the second sentence, surely this should be earlier?
  • Fixed.-- Astros4477 ( Talk) 19:00, 27 July 2013 (UTC) reply
• "$25,000,000 - $30,000,000[1]" en-dash to separate the numbers, could you use m as million instead of all those zeros?
  • Done.-- Astros4477 ( Talk) 19:13, 27 July 2013 (UTC) reply
• What or who or where is Erie?
  • Which Erie are you talking about? Lake Erie and Erie County are both mentioned in the article.-- Astros4477 ( Talk) 18:51, 27 July 2013 (UTC) reply
    • Both then! The Rambling Man ( talk) 09:03, 28 July 2013 (UTC) reply
      • Well Lake Erie was already linked and I linked Erie County.-- Astros4477 ( Talk) 01:33, 29 July 2013 (UTC) reply
• "US$25 million" compare this to the format in the infobox... Consistency here would be good.
  • Done.-- Astros4477 ( Talk) 19:13, 27 July 2013 (UTC) reply
• Stop saying "the new roller coaster" each para and reiterate "GateKeeper".
  • Done.-- Astros4477 ( Talk) 19:09, 27 July 2013 (UTC) reply
• "The park had to do hundreds" -> "had to do" is yuck prose. Maybe "Hundreds of tests were conducted..."?
  • Fixed.-- Astros4477 ( Talk) 19:06, 27 July 2013 (UTC) reply
• Image captions which aren't complete sentences don't need a period.
  • Fixed.-- Astros4477 ( Talk) 19:02, 27 July 2013 (UTC) reply
• "About 12,000,000 pounds" again, why not "12 million"?
  • I'm not sure how to change that when using the convert template.-- Astros4477 ( Talk) 19:04, 27 July 2013 (UTC) reply
    • {{ convert}} has instructions on how to use parameters such as e6 to reduce down to "millions" rather than "000,000"... The Rambling Man ( talk) 09:03, 28 July 2013 (UTC) reply
      • Done.-- Astros4477 ( Talk) 01:38, 29 July 2013 (UTC) reply
• Is it GateKeeper or GateKeeper? Be consistent.
  • Fixed.-- Astros4477 ( Talk) 18:55, 27 July 2013 (UTC) reply
• Check reference titles for compliance with WP:DASH i.e. use en-dash and not spaced hyphens.
  • Fixed.-- Astros4477 ( Talk) 19:25, 27 July 2013 (UTC) reply
• Seven external links looks a little bit adverty to me.
  • Fixed.-- Astros4477 ( Talk) 18:55, 27 July 2013 (UTC) reply

Some issues, but nothing too major, so I'll put it on hold for a week. The Rambling Man ( talk) 16:47, 27 July 2013 (UTC) reply

I addressed all your comments.-- Astros4477 ( Talk) 19:28, 27 July 2013 (UTC) reply