"After Private Jack McAlpin crashes his car into a tree after two separate hallucinatory incidents, a voodoo symbol drawn on it." Fragmented sentence
"In North Carolina, an agitated United States Marine Corps private, Jack McAlpin, after several hallucinatory episodes, drives his car into a tree and is apparently killed." Kind of a disjointed sentence. Maybe change to "In North Carolina, an agitated United States Marine Corps private named Jack McAlpin experiences several hallucinatory episodes and drives his car into a tree; he is apparently killed."
"...but sees blood coming out of his ham" Just wanted to make sure this was written correctly; his ham? Yikes!
"Scully cuts herself on the hand..." -> Scully cuts her hand
Who is Dunham? Who introduce him out of nowhere (I immediately thought of my
Dunham (-: )
"While he didn't look like a military man, the producers felt he had the quality they were looking for in the role." The first part is subjective (who says he didn't look like a military man?)
"The sequence where a man came out of Scully's hand and strangled her came about by using a mechanical hand which the actor stuffed his gelatine covered fingers through". What male actor? I thought we were talking about Scully (Gillian Anderson)?
What is a sump pump? Is there a relevant wikilink?
10.8 or 10.9 million households?
"The episode was the highest rated episode of the first two seasons" -> "Fresh Bones" was the highest rated episode of the first two seasons
"In their book, X-Treme possibility, authors Keith Topping and Paul Cornell ..." Should X-Treme possibility be italicized? And is possibility meant to not be capitalized?
Oh, whoops, sorry, missed that one. Now, I believe they're all fixed. Also, side note: I'd love an X-Files/Fringe cross-over... somehow.--
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21:15, 17 February 2012 (UTC)reply
There have also been a number of Twin Peaks and X-Files references in various Fringe episodes (but it'd be cool if Mulder and Scully actually stopped by!) Anyways, article looks good. Passing for GA. Nice work, Ruby2010/201304:24, 18 February 2012 (UTC)reply