Citations do not need to be in the lead unless that information is unique to the lead.
The spacing of the citations at the end of sentences needs to be fixed. There does not need to be an extra space between the period and the citation and in between consecutive citations.
Combine the sentences "The flight crew consisted of eleven civilians based out of California. [2] It was piloted by Captain Gregory P. Thomas. [4] Four of the crew were women."
The sentence "80 minutes after departure, at 14:22 GMT, the pilot radioed a routine message and gave his position as being 280 miles west of Clark Air Force Base at coordinates (13°40′N 140°0′E / 13.667°N 140°E / 13.667; 140)." should not begin with a numeral, spell it out as "Eighty" instead.
Citation needed for "The aircraft was not seen or heard from again."
Citation needed for "The Navy, Air Force, Coast Guard, and Marines ordered aircraft and ships to the area."
The Investigation section consists of many one-sentence paragraphs. These short paragraphs need to be combined together.
Two consecutive references need to be in numerical order, i.e. "[7][9]" not "[9][7]".
In the paragraph "Flying Tiger Lines released a statement outlining some possible reasons for the two occurrences, including sabotage of either or both aircraft, and kidnapping of Flight 739 and its passengers. [9][7] The airline also said that these were merely "wild guesses" and that there was no evidence to support either theory.[9][7]", remove first set of references as it can be supported by the second set at the end of the paragraph.
Combined it to read: "The flight crew consisted of eleven civilians based out of California, including four women. [2]. The pilot was Captain Gregory P. Thomas. [4]" Is that good enough or should the pilot info be somehow combined into the first sentence as well? --
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