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Reviewer: IDV ( talk · contribs) 15:06, 8 December 2015 (UTC)
Taking this on.-- IDV talk 15:06, 8 December 2015 (UTC)
All right. Keep in mind that I have not played any Final Fantasy games (unless you count Mana).
There was a day-night cycle tied to the real-world time of day, and includes a social element- switches to present tense, and it is not said what the social element is included with.
whereby talking with a befriending certain characters- is that "a" supposed to be "and"? Or is one of "talking with" and "befriending" not supposed to be there?
The game, which acts as a companion to the original game,- is the original game Type-0, or does it refer to something else?
an alternate cycle of conflict- I don't know what this means.
The original protagonists- of Type-0? Or some other game?
the game had five hundred thousand registered users- is there a reason to not write it as "500,000"?
sets out on missions across Orience.- might be good to mention what Orience is here. I've already read the rest of the article, but if I hadn't I might have wondered if it was a town, a country, whatever.
but eventually is soon able to explore- I feel like "eventually" and "soon" aren't both needed - pick one.
Recurring creatures such as Moogles and Chocobos appear.- okay, so I recognize these names, but you might want to say that they're recurring creatures within the Final Fantasy series. Also, the sentence comes out of nowhere and ends very suddenly - Okay, so Moogles and Chocobos appear, but what are they, in what context do they appear? Maybe tie it together with the next sentence with a colon?
special control stick- Is this a virtual controller on the screen? Is there anything special about it, because that sounds like the standard way of doing "traditional" button controls on a touch screen.
The character's bedroom- "The player character's bedroom", or "The Cadet's bedroom".
The in-game time is also synchronized with real-world time.Like, if you play at night it's night in the game world? It's very sudden and doesn't really elaborate on how it works. Additionally, I don't think the word "also" is needed.
Successfully completing quests- "Successfully" seems unnecessary, unless it's possible for a quest to be marked as completed without the player succeeding at the task?
Two other crucial characters- Not so sure that we should be calling something "crucial".
In the First Phase,- the reader doesn't necessarily know this yet.
The first hint of a localization appeared when the Agito trademark filed for European territories.When was this?
Later, at TGS,- Which TGS was this? 2013?
Looks pretty good. Placing this on hold for a week..-- IDV talk 16:12, 8 December 2015 (UTC)