"a nine-year veteran of Eastern", "Eastern" sounds colliqual here.
"Though the control tower responded that Flight 663 was at a higher altitude than Flight 212, it was, in fact, lower." should be combined with the following paragraph.
The Aftermath and investigation contains many short paragraphs that should be combined.
"The Navy" sounds colliqual.
The sentence "An additional thirteen Coast Guard vessels searched the shores of Long Island salvage efforts." sounds awkward.
Are there any pictures that can be added to the article?
"a nine-year veteran of Eastern", "Eastern" sounds colliqual here.
Done changed to "Eastern Airlines".
"The Navy" sounds colliqual.
Done changed to "United States Navy".
Though the control tower responded that Flight 663 was at a higher altitude than Flight 212, it was, in fact, lower." should be combined with the following paragraph.
The Aftermath and investigation contains many short paragraphs that should be combined.
The sentence "An additional thirteen Coast Guard vessels searched the shores of Long Island salvage efforts." sounds awkward.
All Done did some rewording, and reorganized the paragraphs.
Are there any pictures that can be added to the article?