The main issue I see here is one of referencing. Specifically, there are no references whatsoever in the "Gameplay" section and parts of "Sales" need refs.
"E.T. is also notable for being the first video game to credit a graphics artist, with the initials of E.T.'s artist, Jerome Domurat, being hidden as an Easter egg. Howard Scott Warshaw also had his initials hidden as an Easter egg.[6]" That's a bit of a random bit of trivia that either needs to be folded somewhere, fleshed out in another paragraph, or cut altogether.
There are lots of one to two line paragraphs that like the example above need to be rearranged, beefed up or cut.
The second main issue is that of bias. As noted on the talk page (and now in the article, albeit in a strange fashion) there are really only more modern reviews of the game. The reception needs to be beefed up with contemporary accounts.
Rul3r- The copy edits are just what the doctor ordered, but the player review from GameSpot and Loot Ninja review don't meet
WP:RS. I'll try give the article a sweep later this week and see if I can add some citations too.
David- In response to the images, I recommend that
File:ET2600-TheBestPart.png be removed as a title screen doesn't say much in my opinion. I think
File:ET2600-Pit.gif could be moved to the "Reception", because I remember a few reviewers discussing the pits. Since it's also a common gameplay element, I think there's cause to include it. That'll trim down the non-free images and give the current ones better context. Any thoughts? (
Guyinblack25talk15:09, 21 September 2009 (UTC))reply
Guy - I have just removed the dubious sources. Fragmaster seems to satisfy most of the statements made. Haven't found a source for levitation though. I'll keep looking. -
RUL3R*
trolling*
vandalism18:59, 21 September 2009 (UTC)reply
David- I've dug up sources for the article, but I was unable to find any actual reviews from the 1980s. The best I could find was mention of an October 1982 Newsweek article praising Atari's procurement of the video game license. I don't have the article though, just an article that mentions the article. :-\
Question about sources- how vital do you think the content from the
archived Beep Bop Boop interview and
The A.V. Club's
interview is? Should these refs be removed or can they stay? I'm still looking for other sources to see if that content can be replaced, but I'm running out of places to look.
Doesn't seem like there's much need of it period; it's an unintelligible mess that doesn't add much comprehension (I think reader's imagination will result in more edification than that image.)
Der Wohltemperierte Fuchs (
talk)15:10, 1 October 2009 (UTC)reply
Finally took care of that BeepBopBoop reference. The prose could use some more polishing, but I think the article is as good as I can make it. Is it enough to close the GAR? (
Guyinblack25talk19:32, 14 October 2009 (UTC))reply