Overall looks pretty good. In good conscience, however, it would be an insult to the genre to outright pass a metal article that lacked needed umlauts. I've fixed the missing ones in the band member name. Please copyedit and proofread, then contact me for a second review.
DurovaCharge!19:35, 6 December 2008 (UTC)reply
Can the second review begin or the article failed? It doesn't seem that anything has happened to this article in a month plus.
Wizardman14:15, 21 January 2009 (UTC)reply
When I do an article review I like to provide a Heading-by-Heading breakdown of suggestions for how to make the article better. It is done in good faith as a means to improve the article. It does not mean that the article is not GA quality, or that the issues listed are keeping it from GA approval. I also undertake minor grammatical and prose edits. After I finish this part of the review I will look at the over arching quality of the article in light of the GA criteria and make my determination as to the overall quality of the article.
A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with
the layout style guideline:
B.
Reliable sources are
cited inline. All content that
could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose):
No images, big need for this article but not enough to fail it since GA criteria states "wherever possible images should be included." In discussing this with editor I am assured that no free images exist currently.
With such a large quote you need to put it in block quotes. See
MOS for how to do this.
Done using <blockquote></blockquote>
Last paragraph is one sentence, either expand or combine with the paragraph above to remove stub.
Done, combined in a unique para.
Check your tense through this section, at points you are in the past tense and then you move to the present. Since the album came out in 2004 you should stay in the past tense.
H1nkles (
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19:38, 29 January 2009 (UTC)reply
You should put quote marks around the names of the magazines that reviewed the albums - this would apply to the previous subsection as well.
Done.
There are some minor prose issues that are enough to warrant a prose review of the article. I fixed one small thing at the end of this subsection but you should go through it and make sure the prose is all clean.
H1nkles (
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19:52, 29 January 2009 (UTC)reply
I like accessdates w/in 3-4 months of my review. Please fix the ones from August, they're a little far out.
Done, all "very well" updated now.
The reference to the MySpace blog is a questionable one. Can you support the credibility of this citation? I usually look with suspicion on blogs in general as they are primarily opinion-based. Please support the use of this citation here and if your argument makes sense I'll go with it.
The article is descent, please address the issues listed above.
Prose could use a little work.
Per GA criteria there should be a photo if possible. I think a photo should be available that would meet
Fair Use standards. This should at least be explored and if nothing is available then please explain that here.
I have the albums covers, but they don't add nothing relevant to article.
The article could be expanded but I think it covers just barely enough of the subject so I won't fail it for lack of information. That said it could really use some more information on what the band is doing now (it sounds from the article that they've been searching for band members for over a year). What happened that caused the other members to quit? Do they have any tour dates or another studio album planned for 2009?
Take care of these things and it should pass. I'll put the article on hold for one week until 2/5/09 and then take a look at your progress. Thanks for the interesting read.
H1nkles (
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20:06, 29 January 2009 (UTC)reply
Second review
The article is improved. I will pass it but it does need a bit more work.
Don't italicize websites in the references. Per
WP:CITE only journals, newspapers, books and magazines are italicized. This will need to be fixed.
I'm not that put the sites in italic, the template does this automatically with the field |work=.
Please work on an image, something must be out there that can be added.
Of course, I will try to send an e-mail to the band.
It's a shame the timeline had to be removed.
I fully agree with you.
That said I will pass it as a GA if you will fix these few things. Congratulations and it was a pleasure to work with you on this review.
H1nkles (
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04:15, 1 February 2009 (UTC)reply