GA review (see
here for what the criteria are, and
here for what they are not)
It's almost there, but it's not quite there yet. It's a
death by a thousand cuts kind of situation. It's a decent article, but a lot of little things weigh it down.
The
"Development" can use some work. There are a few statements which should be written to sound more natural and neutral. Things can be attributed and stuff, you know? The Plot section could also use some work to provide better context for who random characters are (ie. Kokichi is only mentioned once with no explanation as to who they are). Trying not to nitpick, but if I didn't know the game's plot from watching YouTube reviews, I would have no idea what the article was talking about half the time. Finally, the
WP:italics in the article needs to a look-through; it's all inconsistent.
I'm pretty strict about how citation templates get filled out. I like to see references filled out completely, consistently, and clearly. While the references to Gematsu are pretty major offenders in this regard (with some using |publisher= when they mean to use |work= or leaving - Gematsu in |title=), they aren't the only ones with issues. Also, what's with
this footnote?
File:DebateScrumdialogue.png needs a better fair use rationale. I'd like to see one or two images to break up the "Plot", "Development", and "Promotion and release" sections. I know there is not a lot of things you can put there free media-wise, but I will note that you do have some options (a picture of the game console, some of the game's voice actors, etc).
Hmm, I'm not sure either of those are helpful. It appeared on a plethora of games consoles, and whilst we have free images of
Erika Harlacher, who was the game's false protagonist, we don't have one for
Sayaka Kanda, who did the original game audio, which would be my preference. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski(
talk •
contribs)13:15, 19 October 2021 (UTC)reply
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Lee Vilenski: I tried adding more creation about the game involving the handling of the two protagonists and an image if it helps to illustrate such twist. Siliconera has commentary about Kodaka discussing the "reality tv twist" if it helps. Feel free to revise anything.
Tintor2 (
talk)
23:09, 21 October 2021 (UTC)reply
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Lee Vilenski: I suppose the same issues I have now are the same issues I had earlier. The italics are still inconsistent to a fault. Things like Magazines and video games (even in prose) should always be italicised. However, mini-games and game modes should not be italicized per
MOS:NOITALICHangman's Gambit 3.0 vs Death Road of Despair. Once that is all fixed, I'll take another look to see if I missed anything more significant. –MJL‐Talk‐☖02:46, 29 October 2021 (UTC)reply