"to a noble, government-employee father and his wife" -> consider rephrasing this; as is "noble" seems to be used as a generic adjective ("he is noble and grand") rather than specifically stating he's a member of the nobility. Reworded. It had originally been linked "As a child he enjoyed watching films and stage performances, at times sneaking out of his home after curfew to watch performances" -> repetition of "performances". Try "productions" for the first one instead. Done, ish. "despite his parents hopes" -> missing possessive Done "which were considered not compliant with the need for modernisation" -> try "incompatible" rather than "not compliant" Sounds good "garnered him best director at the first FFI in 1954" -> "garnered him the award for best director at the first FFI in 1954" Done "Djajakusuma's later film Bimo Kroda won Best Director at the 1967" -> surely he, and not the film, won the award. How's this?