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Freikorp (
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12:16, 9 December 2017 (UTC)
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Don't feel obligated but I'm looking for comments on my
current peer review if you're interested.
Freikorp (
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12:16, 9 December 2017 (UTC)
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Is it reasonably well written ?
"lead mice into their rockets" - the use of the word 'their' raises the question of why they have rockets, also it isn't clear at this stage what the rockets do (they could be a weapon to use on the cats), how about simply 'lead mice into escape rockets'? I'm open to alternate wording.
I agree that's the best way to say it, fixed
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Private server in the lead
Done
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sprites ; non-gamers won't know what this means
Done
"He noted there are two trends" - this is his opinion. As per
WP:WORDS i'd replace "noted" with "stated" or another neutral term
I am bad about doing that, fixed
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Wii U
Done
"hook up 4 Game Boy Advances" - '4' should be spelt out as 'four'
Done
Is it factually accurate and
verifiable ?
A. Has an
appropriate reference section :
There's inconsistency in the references. I.e some publications are spelt out (PlanetDreamcast) whereas others are given with the url (www.dreamcastlive.net, sega.jp). Replace the url formatted ones.
Fixed url ones
I'd format 'ChuChu Rocket! credits. Sega, 1999' with
Template:Cite video game
Done
B. Citation to reliable sources
where necessary :
There's one [citation needed] tag. Obviously the preceding sentence needs to be cited or removed.
I cannot find a source. I think the image stands fine on its own to explain this. Removed.
C.
No original research :
Is it broad in its coverage ?
A.
Major aspects :
B.
Focused :
Is it
neutral ?
Fair representation without bias:
Is it stable ?
No
edit wars , etc:
Does it contain
images to illustrate the topic?
A. Images are
tagged with their
copyright status , and
valid fair use rationales are provided for
non-free content :
B. Images are provided if possible and are
relevant to the topic, and have
suitable captions :
Overall :
Pass or Fail: Looks pretty good overall. Placing on hold until issues are addressed.
Freikorp (
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12:36, 9 December 2017 (UTC)
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Freikorp : Responded
TarkusAB
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16:37, 9 December 2017 (UTC)
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Looks good. Happy for this to pass now.
Freikorp (
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23:08, 9 December 2017 (UTC)
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