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PCN02WPS: This is my full review. Honestly, I didn't catch much that needed to be corrected. Please let me know when you've had a chance to implement my suggestions. Thank you!
Kimikel (
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01:22, 13 July 2024 (UTC)reply
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PCN02WPS thank you for the quick response - I'm awaiting clarification on whether or not I have the authority to close this review. Once that gets cleared up this should be able to be approved for GA.
Kimikel (
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03:27, 14 July 2024 (UTC)reply
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PCN02WPS I just got the go-ahead to close this one out. Looked through the article once again and everything seemed good. Thank you for your quick response and quality work. I'm going to pass this one now.
Kimikel (
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14:27, 14 July 2024 (UTC)reply
Well-written
Nothing on a copyvio check.
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"gained it" > gained the school
"There, he worked to distance..." > this sentence uses a "triple and", i would break it up however you see fit
"broadly favored" > which was broadly favored
"G.I. Bill as" > G.I. Bill, as
"resigned the presidency" > resigned from the presidency
"it was not a drastic one" > I feel like this qualifier is kind of unnecessary; a reader can decide if a 20/30% decrease is drastic or not.
"getting back on track with" > realigning with
"effect—complete with 180 signatures—with" > replace tacks with commas
"But this shift" > However, this shift
"consequences:" > consequences, as
"By the end of his term in 1958, the school's enrollment had doubled, ultimately reaching 1,400 students" > it was 1,400 as of the time of his death, not by the end of his term. this sentence implies that it was 1,400 by the end of his term, i would reword this.
Can [40] and [42] be archived? Neither are accessible
Archival won't particularly help there, as both sources are paywalled (or require a user to log-in). FN 40 already had the correct |url-access=subscription parameter but I've added it to FN 42 as well.
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16:25, 13 July 2024 (UTC)reply