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Reviewer: Compdude123 ( talk · contribs) 22:53, 23 November 2012 (UTC) Hello, this is my first GA review so bear with me. I know you've done lots of GA reviews, so if I'm missing anything, please let me know. — Comp dude 123 22:53, 23 November 2012 (UTC) reply

Overall review

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose): b ( MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c ( OR):
    Most of the sources are in Norwegian, and since I don't speak that language, I cannot verify any of the sources. Hopefully you have done this.
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:

Lead

History

  • The following two sentences could be combined: "The following thirteen years Brønnøysund only saw occasional landings. Norwegian Air Lines started a service from Bergen to Tromsø on 7 June 1935, which included a stop at the harbor in Brønnøysund." Would suggest saying something like "Brønnøysund only saw occasional landings until 7 June 1935, when Norwegian Air Lines started a service from Bergen to Tromsø with a stop at the harbor in Brønnøysund."
  • "The aircraft turned out to have too little capacity" – Consider saying something more concise, like "The aircraft turned out to be too small...".
    • My thought here is that the aircraft were replaced because they had too few seats (=capacity), but if other people don't understand it the way I do I can always convert to small. For a aviation-oriented audience I would have written "too low pax". Arsenikk (talk) 00:00, 24 November 2012 (UTC) reply
It now says "The aircraft turned out to have too small..." – The "have" should be changed to "be" in order to correct this grammatical error. Or you could say "The aircraft's passenger capacity was too small..." — Comp dude 123 18:49, 28 November 2012 (UTC) reply
Hey, could you fix this please? Thanks, Comp dude 123 16:00, 5 December 2012 (UTC) reply

More reviewing to come... — Comp dude 123 22:53, 23 November 2012 (UTC) reply

Thank you for commencing the review. Arsenikk (talk) 00:00, 24 November 2012 (UTC) reply

So far, so good. Looks like there's just some minor changes you need to make. Also, I take it you have checked all the references to make sure they provide proper verification for the text in question, right? I can't really do this myself since most of this article's sources are in Norwegian, a language I don't know. — Comp dude 123 18:30, 29 November 2012 (UTC) reply

All information is properly cited in the inline references. Arsenikk (talk) 10:54, 30 November 2012 (UTC) reply

Facilities

Looks fine; don't see anything wrong with the section. — Comp dude 123 18:50, 29 November 2012 (UTC) reply

Airlines and destinations

Nothing to comment. — Comp dude 123 18:50, 29 November 2012 (UTC) reply

Incidents and accidents

Future

I have put this article on hold. There is just one more thing in the history section I need you to fix. — Comp dude 123 16:05, 5 December 2012 (UTC) reply

The one outstanding issue has been fixed. Arsenikk (talk) 20:54, 9 December 2012 (UTC) reply
Okay great, this is now a good article. Congratulations! — Comp dude 123 06:15, 10 December 2012 (UTC) reply