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Reviewer: Czarking0 ( talk · contribs) 04:43, 21 February 2024 (UTC)
“no detail about the goals, difficulties, or successes of his endeavors.”This not for me to do. I cannot make a statement like that if not included in the sources. Check WP:OR. also consider the availability of sources when recommending such a substantial improvement
“Malwal and Abel Alier continued to broadcast the news from Juba instead from Omdurman" this is not grammatically correct”, how? What is the grammatical problem here?Please explain. I might not be a native speaker but I think I know my way around forming a coherent sentence.you should also suggest solutions not only problems, see Wikipedia:Reviewing good articles#Mistakes to avoid in reviews
"Malwal authored many books including "Sudan and South Sudan: From One to Two" in 2015, which considered as his political memoir" This is not grammatically correct. I assume it should be "is considered" but that raises the question by whom? See MOS:ALLEGED”.. again what is the grammatical problem?
It failed being stable because “This is biography of the living person but he is very old. I expect he will die soon and then this will need to be updated.”that does not follow any policy! Actually it is against policy. It is called crystal balling
fails image because “No images. I expect it may be difficult to find appropriate ones but I'd like the editors to indicate that they tried”.That is not a reason to fail. Please cite policies especially if you are going to fail something/
"Also if you say that a person became something during a period of years it implies there is uncertainty about when they took on the role."no it does not. Saying that some worked between x and y is saying just that. That is a difference in style and is not a cause to fail articles. see Wikipedia:Good article nominations/Instructions
"he resigned in protest against the shift to Sharia law" This sentence is uncited."actually is cited!
He again became member the national assembly between 1974 and 1978should read
... became a member of the national assembly ...).
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Nice work from @FuzzyMagma the article has come a long way. I hope this adds to the standard of what makes a GA in the Sudan project |
@ FuzzyMagma here is an update on the ICC case:
https://www.icc-cpi.int/darfur/albashir Czarking0 ( talk) 01:48, 17 March 2024 (UTC)
"Another major development scheme affected by the war is the World Bank-funded rice project in the Malwal Dinka area of Aweil. Located in the transitional grazing areas, the project was initially opposed by the Dinka and only after much demonstration of its utility was it accepted. Rice was used to prepare traditional foods and brew local beer, usually produced from sorgham. Covering an area of one million acres, the project was intended to make the Sudan self-sufficient in rice.45 Although the project is still productive, its capacity has been considerably reduced by the effects of the war. With the frequent interruption of railroad transportation to the North, marketing has also been adversely affected. Nevertheless, the project demonstrated that the Dinka are receptive to development." [2]
I found this and I was wondering if you think it is worth adding anything. Bona Malwal gave this information to reporter Czarking0 ( talk) 02:00, 17 March 2024 (UTC)
"The southern famine migrants did not become a political scandal in the way that the 1984 drought migrants had been, to the extent that when a train full of starving famine migrants arrived at Khartoum railways station in April 1988, and six children died at the station itself, the only paper to report on the incident was the Sudan Times, edited by the veteran southern politician Bona Malwal." [3]
"But notable in this volume are the original poems and songs, poems by Eva Gillies and Ruth Padel, dedicated to Godfrey, and three Dinka songs translated by Bona Malwal, in his memory. In these songs Godfrey appears as Thienydeng, his Dinka ox-name, meaning shaft of lightning, that is, rain, or the black bull with a white stripe, the symbol of a senior elder. One song praises Thienydeng for having presented Dinka ways of life and beliefs so well to the world." [4]