Five citations after "Réard hoped his swimsuit's revealing style would create an "explosive commercial and cultural reaction" similar to the explosion at Bikini Atoll" seems excessive per WP:OVERCITE. Try grouping these to reduce clutter.
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Four of the aforementioned references uses the "ref name" syntax. Is there any way to group them? If not, what else can be done to reduce clutter?
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Since none of those refs were used more than once, I got rid of the "ref name" fields (which is only needed for multiple uses of a ref) and combined them myself
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Is "superfluous" in "removed skirt panels and other superfluous material" the most encyclopedic word choice?
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"Superfluous" is used here to mean what it technically means - something that is flowing over (super- ‘over’ + fluere ‘to flow’) - very Middle English and certainly a very appropriate description of skirt-like panels. What could be an alternate - Effusive? Exuding? Emitting? Emanating? Please, advice.
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Six citations right after "almost simultaneously launched their new two-piece swimsuit ranges in 1946" seems excessive per WP:OVERCITE. It might help to group some of the references so that there are only two or three footnotes.
"In a 1950 Time magazine interview, American swimsuit mogul Fred Cole, owner of mass market swimwear firm Cole of California, stated that he had 'little but scorn for France's famed Bikinis'" → "In 1950, American swimsuit mogul Fred Cole and owner of mass market swimwear firm Cole of California told Time that he had 'little but scorn for France's famed Bikinis'"
Add a comma after "controversy" in "As a result of the controversy the bikini was explicitly banned from many other beauty pageants worldwide"
"The Hays Code was abandoned by the mid-1960s, and with it the prohibition of female navel exposure, as well as other restrictions. The influence of the National Legion of Decency had also waned by the 1960s." is unsourced, and the sentence on National Legion influence seems incomplete.
I'm not sure if the "Top 10 Bikinis in Pop Culture" should be in list form. Try instead discussing them in prose.
I was considering a few things - (a) since the section is mostly about the impact of pop-culture on the subject, may be a list of the tops from a robust source adds much value; (b) lists that are encyclopedic and well cited are a part of the Wikipedia, embedded within articles or as stand alone lists; (c) most of the entries in the list already have their own articles; (d) a running list inside the prose may be a bit cumbersome to read; and (e) a side bar is visually appealing. Please, advice.
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"who's" from "young girl who's too shy" should be "who is" per WP:CONTRACTIONS
"The 1967 film An Evening in Paris, is mostly remembered today because in it Bollywood actress Sharmila Tagore became the first Indian actress to wear a bikini on film"..... remove the comma, and see WP:RELTIME regarding "Today".
FN203: Same as FN110 ✗Quoting a newspaper to support the fact that the newspaper printed something is a valid use of a historical record. Consider
WP:RSCONTEXT. The Mail a proper source here
I'm really sorry, but checklinks indicates more than "a few" need addressing. I'm still not sure about the "Top 10 Bikinis in Popular Culture" being in list form, either. While this is being failed for now, but your efforts are commendable and you did well. It could also be worth looking through for any potential room for prose improvement I might've missed before renominating (just a thought). Better luck next time.
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00:41, 7 March 2015 (UTC)reply