Not sure exactly what the "1930 school athletic sports" were, but if it was just a school-wide competition I think his second place in the high jump and cricket ball throwing skills are probably a little trivial - saying he was a successful sportsman might be more appropriate
I've trimmed this - that was added by another editor and I agree that it is somewhat trivial to mention it here.
Zawed (
talk) 10:37, 8 September 2022 (UTC)reply
He trained on Hurricanes; was this what 238/601/1 Sqns flew?
Have added.
Zawed (
talk) 01:44, 10 September 2022 (UTC)reply
Did he see combat/service with 601?
Have add mention of one sortie.
Zawed (
talk) 01:44, 10 September 2022 (UTC)reply
I know we've discussed exact dates for promotions and the like in the past; I think it would be useful to know how soon after his first kill he was promoted. This would all be a lot easier if the London Gazette had carried all the promotions..!
Have mentioned more precisely the time of promotion. I haven't put the precise date as one thing I try to do with fighter pilot articles, which I find are often "date heavy" is to vary the language for expressing dates - so if an exact date is in the same or near sentence, I often will say week/month later rather than an exact date.
Zawed (
talk) 01:44, 10 September 2022 (UTC)reply
What are we considering a "tour of operations" to be?
I actually don't know for sure. I *think* it is about 12 months but that may depend on how many sorties were flown in that period as well.
Zawed (
talk) 01:44, 10 September 2022 (UTC)reply
You provide the associated RAF station for some of his squadrons but not all? E.g. 601, 60 OTU, 485
Added.
Zawed (
talk) 01:44, 10 September 2022 (UTC)reply
You're very selective about which units get put on the infobox list and which don't; what's your criteria?
The period of service with some squadrons were quite brief and don't, to my mind, justify going into the infobox. I have put the major ones in though.
Zawed (
talk) 01:44, 10 September 2022 (UTC)reply
What did 222 fly?
Have added.
Zawed (
talk) 02:18, 10 September 2022 (UTC)reply
"On 19 April" I assume that this is 1944 but you don't say for sure
Should be clear now that I have clarified his posting to 65; I think I may have intended to do this when writing up the article but forgot.
Zawed (
talk) 02:18, 10 September 2022 (UTC)reply
Do we know what he was shot down by?
No info in the sources.
Zawed (
talk) 02:18, 10 September 2022 (UTC)reply
References
References look good, all links work. Might suggest splitting ref. #12 but that's a very minor quibble
Have gone ahead and split the ref.
Zawed (
talk) 02:19, 10 September 2022 (UTC)reply
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Zawed: That's my initial run through finished. Per my earlier edit summary sincere apologies for taking so long on this.
Pickersgill-Cunliffe (
talk) 16:07, 5 September 2022 (UTC)reply
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Pickersgill-Cunliffe:, thanks for the thorough review. I have dealt with/responded to the various issues identified. Cheers,
Zawed (
talk) 02:19, 10 September 2022 (UTC)reply