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This is a solidly organized article, and a good place for someone to find an introduction to the Ayoreo people. Here are some suggestions for improvement and expansion.
Some of the names listed under Name and language are words for the entire people and some are names of subgroups within them. See
[1]. Add the sentence about seven clans into its own section listing them.
The information on land loss is fascinating, but could probably be placed into a land and territory section. On the Bolivian side, the Ayoreo have four titled
Native Community Lands, which are listed in this chart:
[2] (Don't be intimidated by the minimal Spanish, and use translate.google.com if you need to.) Here's the citation: Fundación Tierra (2011). Territorios Indígena Originario Campesinos en Bolivia: Entre la Loma Santa y la Pachamama. La Paz: Fundación Tierra.
Who are the leaders of CANOB and UNAP?
Is there an Ayoreo education system?
Could you make a section describing their traditional religion and the process of evangelization by Christians?
Peer Review: The introduction to the article is very good! I think it does a job of hitting the major points without going to extensively into any one aspect of the topic yet. Under the culture section, I would clarify if the connection is known as Eami or if the territory is. It is a little bit unclear what "known" refers to there. I would also include what time period the records of infanticide were from. Also, when you talk about youth and scholarships, I would use "desire" or "need" instead of "wish". There are maybe a few word choice issues like this, but overall this is a very good article. The way the sections are divided is logical and flows well and I can tell that your research is strong. Good job!
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