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Reviewer: Khazar2 ( talk · contribs) 14:20, 3 January 2013 (UTC)
I'll be glad to take this review. I'll first do a close readthrough, noting any initial issues as I go, and then will begin the criteria checklist. Looking forward to working with you! -- Khazar2 ( talk) 14:20, 3 January 2013 (UTC)
Overall, this seems like strong work, and I don't anticipate many problems with this getting to GA. Thanks for all your work on this one!
My biggest criticism would be that at times this article reads extremely "dry"; there's lots of hitting numbers, but at points little sense of the events. This isn't one of the GA criteria, so I don't think it's a big deal here, but for general article improvement purposes, it could use more anecdotes or quotes from Huff like the terrific "[My wife] wanted me to hit her a homer. I hit three. Brownie points.". Similarly, it would be useful to have more analysis of Huff's game beyond raw hitting data. How did sportswriters and scouts evaluate him at different points in his career? Did he exceed or fail to live up to his prospect rankings and his contracts? At what points did he struggle? How're his defense and speed? Etc. Compare to a sentence from a source like "On Opening Day, he was showered with boos by the Orioles faithful, but on Sunday afternoon, Aubrey Huff walked out to the mound to a warm reception from that same crowd as he accepted the award for Most Valuable Oriole," which give much more a sense of narrative. Again, this article gives enough of an overview to pass GA, but I wanted to mention this issue for further revision/expansion.
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1. Well-written: | ||
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1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct. | Prose is clear, spot checks show no evidence of copyright issues. |
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1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation. | |
2. Verifiable with no original research: | ||
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2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline. | Article is excellently sourced |
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2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose). | |
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2c. it contains no original research. | |
3. Broad in its coverage: | ||
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3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic. | |
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3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style). | Article is a bit heavy on hitting stats while light on other information, but passes this criterion on the balance. |
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4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each. | |
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5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute. | |
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio: | ||
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6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content. | |
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6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions. | |
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7. Overall assessment. | Pass-- nice work. |