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Thanks, @
Schminnte, for creating a page about music technology that has been carefully researched and written around reliable sources. That's rare in this area of Wikipedia.
Popcornfud (
talk) 17:45, 22 December 2023 (UTC)reply
Thanks so much @
Popcornfud, it means a lot. I sometimes look to articles like the TR-808 to model off, so it's nice to finally meet you! I agree, it is rare to find others truly interested in electronic music and synths, so feel free to reach out whenever now that we've found each other! All the best,
Schminnte [
talk to me 17:52, 22 December 2023 (UTC)reply
GA Review
Passed.
Jon (
talk) 09:27, 28 March 2024 (UTC)reply
The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.
Hi - I'll review this over the next day or so, adding comments below, followed by an initial assessment in the table, then allow some time for a bit of to-and-fro etc. Sorry for the delay. —
Jon (
talk) 00:06, 24 March 2024 (UTC)reply
2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with
the layout style guideline.
Sources OK, layout and use of short-form notes OK.
2b.
reliable sources are
cited inline. All content that
could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose).
it took until the early 21st century for major manufacturers to begin producing analog synthesizers again might read better as something like ...to resume production of analog synthesizers
Done
Background
Introduce Robert Moog, e.g. American engineer Robert Moog, fix "his the" to "his"
Done
Fix redundancy in the last sentence, }In the 1980s, [...] in the 1980s.
Done
20th century: dance music revival
The wording of the citation of Barlindhaug in the second sentence is awkward; perhaps just add a short-form citation to the source (already in §Sources).
Done
More generally the first paragraph needs citations around the 1988 dance music emergence, use of Roland drum machines, etc.
@
Popcornfud: do you have an opportunity to address basically the first half of this first paragraph (of the "20th century: dance music revival" section)? I think if we got the citations fixed up and/or the prose reworked a little, we can pass this as GA. —
Jon (
talk) 12:04, 25 March 2024 (UTC)reply
I noticed the review only yesterday, thank you for taking this on @
Jon. I should be able to carry out these last points as I did with another outstanding nomination, so there's no need for anyone else to do the work I really should be doing! I can look at it sometime tonight.
Schminnte [
talk to me 12:23, 25 March 2024 (UTC)reply
I don't generally get involved in FA/GA stuff any more, but I'm always happy to do some copyediting. If I were reviewing this article, I'd ask for better prose; sentences such as "the growing demand for analog created by this movement was not capitalized on fully for some time" are IMO a little clunky. (Sorry for the bluntness.) I'll see if I can make time for it later this week.
Popcornfud (
talk) 12:25, 25 March 2024 (UTC)reply
Very well, I'll place this on hold which gives us 7 days. Cheers —
Jon (
talk) 20:59, 25 March 2024 (UTC)reply
1) I've changed the in-text citation to an sfn, 2) I've added some more citations to make it clearer which source is being referred to in different sentences, 3) I've changed that particular phrasing and quickly copyedited the prose. I'm more than willing to go through the prose again, just waiting for additional comments if needed. All the best,
Schminnte [
talk to me 00:15, 26 March 2024 (UTC)reply
Cheers, this looks good to me, but I'll have a more thorough look later tonight when I'm free. —
Jon (
talk) 08:03, 27 March 2024 (UTC)reply
Done
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.