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It is of sufficient length, with 1,531 words of readable prose.
The lead is reasonable given the length of the article at 200 words.
79% of the article is authored by
Alanna the Brave, with contributions from 40 other editors.
It is currently assessed as a B class article.
Assessment
The six good article criteria:
It is reasonable well written.
the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct;
Suggest putting commas around the subclause "Ahmose I"
Do you mean "her young son, Ahmose I"? Done. - A.
Thank you.
I believe that the comma in "e.g.," is superfluous.
I checked, and this is a stylistic variation thing (like different varieties of written English). American English and Canadian English both use the comma here, whereas British English often does not. I'm writing in Canadian English, so I'm comfortable leaving the comma. - A.
Seems reasonable.
Should "the body and bandaging was destroyed soon afterwards," be "were"?
Done! - A.
Please remove repeated word "that".
Done. - A.
I can see no other obvious spelling or grammar issues.
I believe that Noria Serrano 2021 states on page 108 "It would not be until the reign of Thutmose I that titles related to civil administration ... would appear linked to the king. During this reign, Queen Mother Ahhotep would have already died," rather than that his reign followed both both Ahmose I and his son Amenhotep I as stated in the article.
I wanted to include some chronological context here, just for readers who may not know exactly when Thutmose I came on the scene -- I've adjusted the citations and cited that portion of the line with the Oxford Encyclopedia "New Kingdom" source. - A.
Images are relevant and clear. Suggest considering using the coffin image in the infobox rather than the ring.
Sure -- I've switched them. It's a pretty large image, but I do like beginning the article with the closest thing we've got to a portrait of Ahhotep. Do you think it would be worth putting a smaller close-up/headshot in the infobox instead of the whole coffin photo? I haven't decided, but could put this on my to-do list for future. - A.
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