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The second paragraph starts immediatly describing the new attempt, you should give context. For example, "On DD MM YYYY, before his second attempt, Carli held a mass..."
Done.
What did he do in concrete to be expelled? Is it known? This phrase should be put in the Biography section since it's not that relevant to the cluster ballooning attempt.
Expanded it a bit, let me know if it's not substantial enough.
Is there more information on his training? The training should be at the beggining of the section in order for the events to be in cronological order.
Moved. I couldn't find any more info about it anywhere.
Sources
All sources numbers are from
this version. Checked source 2, 9, 13 and 15.
Source 2
His mother died, this should be mentioned as the reason for him to move with his father.
Done.
He has sisters and brothers, this should be mentioned.
Done.
He wasn't only a gas station attendent instead he managed it.
The source only says that he was a "
frentista", which translates to attendant.
"Convidado pelo irmão, gerenciou um posto de combustiveis"
That's referring to his father.
He was a defender of truckers and he "found the necessity" to spread God's message to them, this should be mentioned.
Done.
He was a very serviceable priest according to the many acts of service he did, this should be mentioned.
Done?
Indeed my question was answered, he was part of Pastoral Rodoviária'. Information about his work on this organization should be mentioned.
Done.
Image(s)
If we must use a non-free image can't we at least find one with a bit more quality? Or is this the only one available? The map has a free license and a suitable caption.
The majority of good non-free images are from photo agencies (or they don't have enough info to be properly tagged), but I can try to find a more suitable picture.
Couldn't find anything.
Stability
Last edit 2 days ago, no edit wars in place; overall stable, pass!
Comments
Just with source 2 I was capable of finding a lot of information that isn't in the article. I'm going to put this on hold and let you have some days to do an overall expansion, ping me when you're done and I will take another look. Thank you. The
Blue Rider00:27, 16 March 2024 (UTC)reply
I'm a bit hesitant to add info from source 2 since none of the what is mentioned there is included in any other sources. I'll try to expand from it nonetheless. – Hilst[talk]01:02, 16 March 2024 (UTC)reply
Banda B seems reliable enough, maybe they simply decided to take a step further in researching the life of the priest. The
Blue Rider01:20, 16 March 2024 (UTC)reply
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