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The is a small and compact article. There isn't many problems with it but I will only focus on the problems with the article. The Adar oifield sounds interesting. I'll take up this review although I have some real life stuff to do today, I'll leave some comments in a couple of hours.
Jaguar (
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17:09, 21 August 2011 (UTC)reply
Initial comments
Lead:
The lead appears to be a little on the short side. Considering the rest of the article, I think I little more information can be added to the lead.
"The Adar oilfield (Block 3)," - what does Block 3 mean? Bearing in mind that is the first sentence of the article, the reader might not understand what the means.
"However, until recently the focus has been on clearing the population away from the oilfield rather than on a longer term strategy for developing the region." - this is interesting, but it doesn't say why the focus was clearing the population away.
Why? Because the area was heavily populated and they wanted to build roads and infrastructure for setting up the site! Naturally the people don't won't to leave their homes and will only move if forced which may take time. Isn't it obvious?♦
Dr. Blofeld21:23, 21 August 2011 (UTC)reply
"Discharge from the marshes along the Adar is low except in years with exceptionally heavy rainfall." - what is 'the Adar' trying to refer to? Is it referring to the name of the oilfield or the area in South Sudan?
"Chevron discovered the Adar Yale field in 1981" - confusing sentence. The paragraph begins with the Chevron company but it does not explain what Chevron is and what the company does. It does not even explain that they are a company!
Does not explain what Chevron is? Eh? It would be like explaining what Gulf, BP, Esso or Castrol is. I've added "Oil giant" but it wuld be reasonable to just say Chevron Corporation like in the lead.♦
Dr. Blofeld20:51, 21 August 2011 (UTC)reply
Development and production:
"American persons were forbidden to do business with the Greater Nile Petroleum Operating Company" - does 'persons' refer to American companies in the area or the people working at the Adadr oilfield? How about 'personnel' or 'people'?
"Soon after Chevron had closed operations, government troops began attacking civilian settlements in the area" - surely 'government troops' can't be a good term to explain it? Which government? Asuming it was America or Canada, could there be 'American troops'?
This is a small and well referenced article that has very few problems. The small lead was the only main problem with the article, but now the lead has certainly improved. Also, there are very few pictures, but this is no major concern for GA - I also understand that it would be a bit hard trying to take pictures of the Adar Yale in South Sudan! Don't worry about that.
It shouldn't take long to solve those minor copyediting issues, so once they have been addressed I will be happy to grant this GA status.
Jaguar (
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10:37, 22 August 2011 (UTC)reply
Thanks, I will look over this this afternoon. Yes photos are always nice, but South Sudan unfortunately falls into the African category where photos are extremely rare even on the Internet..♦
Dr. Blofeld10:45, 22 August 2011 (UTC)reply
Minor copyedits have been made. I've reread it and it seems to be an effective decent summary of this oilfield now I think and should be good enough for GA if you do a google search on it, pretty well covered I think. Shame we don't have a photograph of the site but it is South Sudan after all. ♦
Dr. Blofeld14:00, 22 August 2011 (UTC)reply
Close - promoted
There have been a lot of improvements to the article and now it definately meets the GA criteria. The lead now complies per
WP:LEAD and the article contains a lot of interesting information which makes it very easy to read. Don't worry about that photos, I'm assuming that even anyone taking pictures in the Adar oilfield would get in trouble due to the political activity! Other than that, very well done on building another Good Article!
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16:07, 22 August 2011 (UTC)reply
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