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Reviewer: Ironholds ( talk) 19:22, 20 June 2010 (UTC) reply

• "two million pounds sterling" - link the current value.
  • Isn't it linked already in the background section? — Ed  (talk • majestic titan) 03:42, 22 June 2010 (UTC) reply
    • That's the section I'm talking about. How much is 2 million pounds sterling today? Ironholds ( talk) 12:19, 22 June 2010 (UTC) reply
      • [1] says 158 million; is this was you were looking for? — Ed  (talk • majestic titan) 05:38, 23 June 2010 (UTC) reply
        • Not exactly; you need to format it in article. See this. Ironholds ( talk) 13:19, 23 June 2010 (UTC) reply
          • Thanks for the example; I've stolen your wording and modified this article. — Ed  (talk • majestic titan) 03:58, 24 June 2010 (UTC) reply
• "Argentine Naval Commission's chief, which was overseeing " - appears to be "the chief, which was overseeing", and thus grammatically incorrect. The second Argentina also seems extraneous. I suggest rearranging it as "Isabel Betbeder, wife to the chief of the Argentine Naval Commission, which was overseeing the construction of the ship"
  • Done, but not with your quite with your wording (may want to double-check me :) — Ed  (talk • majestic titan) 03:42, 22 June 2010 (UTC) reply
• "United States' State Department" - United States Department of State, and link.
  • Done, there was a link earlier but it wasn't very prominent, so I added it again. — Ed  (talk • majestic titan) 03:42, 22 June 2010 (UTC) reply
• "The trials were plagued with serious engine trouble. They culminated on 2 November, when an entire turbine failed," - "The trials were plagued with serious engine trouble, culminating with the failure of an entire turbine on 2 November. Moreno was forced to put in at Rockland, Maine..." and so on. Ironholds ( talk) 19:22, 20 June 2010 (UTC) reply
  • Done, thank you! :) — Ed  (talk • majestic titan) 03:42, 22 June 2010 (UTC) reply