in the lead, The division, which was established using the motor division concept, was fully mobile --> "The division was established using the motor division concept, and was fully mobile..."?
responsible for the completion of training of soldiers who --> "responsible for providing final combat training to soldiers who..."?
I have tweaked this sentence, largely along your lines. I have not stated combat, as French only states platoon, company etc level training and a 3-day exercise. I am unsure if this should be inferred specifically as combat training, or if that would be the correct term to use. I will defer to your judgement.
EnigmaMcmxc (
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18:20, 26 October 2019 (UTC)reply
Too easy, your change works from my perspective. (Looks like modern day infantry minor tactics training to me - essentially very basic combat drills. These are generally followed by more complex collective training at sub unit, unit and then formation level).
AustralianRupert (
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23:57, 26 October 2019 (UTC)reply
the annexation of Sudetenland in --> "the Sudetenland"?
authors of The London Rifle Brigade's History of the War: italics for the title of the book?
This appears to have been implemented in the recent copyedit, "history of the war" is not the title of the book. I have tweaked this sentence, but do you recommend additional changes to avoid future misunderstandings?
EnigmaMcmxc (
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18:20, 26 October 2019 (UTC)reply
placed on the lower establishment: can this term (lower establishment), be defined (potentially in a note)
The next sentence is potentially the closest sourced statement we have about the lower and higher establishment and difference. For example, Joslen doesn't provide different figures for lower-establishment divisions. French suggests they were supposed to be without or reduced number of certain units, but the OOBs suggest this was not a general across the board definition.
EnigmaMcmxc (
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18:20, 26 October 2019 (UTC)reply
the body just says "corps training" but the lead provides more details ("basic training and their job-specific training") -- probably should be the other way around (more detail in the body, less in the lead)
image licencing looks fine, although I'd suggest adding an indicative date to the description page for "File:47th div.svg", outlining when the badge was likely designed
ext links all work; there are no dab or dup links (no action required)
the article is well referenced (no action required)
the Earwig tool reports no copyright violation likely (no action required)
Thank you for the review. I have left some comments above for you, and otherwise actioned your suggestions (hopefully to your satisfaction :) )
EnigmaMcmxc (
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19:33, 26 October 2019 (UTC)reply
a. the prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct; and
b. it complies with the manual of style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.
2. Verifiable with no original research: Y
a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline;
b. all in-line citations are from reliable sources, including those for direct quotations, statistics, published opinion, counter-intuitive or controversial statements that are challenged or likely to be challenged, and contentious material relating to living persons—science-based articles should follow the scientific citation guidelines;
c. it contains no original research; and
d. it contains no copyright violations nor plagiarism.
3. Broad in its coverage: Y
a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic; and
b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).
4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each. Y
5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute Y
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio: Y
a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content; and
b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions.