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Reviewer: Resident Mario ( talk · contribs) 04:17, 13 July 2012 (UTC) Nice, short article. Res Mar 04:17, 13 July 2012 (UTC) reply

Lead

• The first sentence should be reconfigured to the more standard "The X was when Y happened".
  • Done. Hawkeye7 ( talk) 09:36, 13 July 2012 (UTC) reply
• The lead should mention the weather conditions at the time of the accident.
  • Done. Hawkeye7 ( talk) 09:36, 13 July 2012 (UTC) reply

Infobox

• I don't think "Crashed into building" is an accident type in the way Engine Failure on Take-Off or Controlled flight into terrain would be.
  • Went with Controlled flight into terrain. Hawkeye7 ( talk) 09:36, 13 July 2012 (UTC) reply
• The exact time of the crash is not mentioned past the infobox, and should be cited there.
  • Added to article. Hawkeye7 ( talk) 09:36, 13 July 2012 (UTC) reply

The crash

• By the roof, do you mean the building roof, or the plane roof?
  • Re-worded to make this unambiguous. Hawkeye7 ( talk) 09:36, 13 July 2012 (UTC) reply

Investigation and aftermath

• What do you mean by "predictably"?
  • Delete word. Hawkeye7 ( talk) 09:36, 13 July 2012 (UTC) reply
• All issues addressed. Hawkeye7 ( talk) 09:36, 13 July 2012 (UTC) reply