I have now completed reviewing this article against the criteria and am placing it on hold pending some concerns outlined below. This is quite a good article, and only requires a few minor improvements before GA. Cheers,
Abraham, B.S. (
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10:23, 17 February 2009 (UTC)reply
"the “major” told the hotel clerk..." - this is the first mention of a "major", and is slightly confusing. I presume you are referring to one of the VC agents? If so, this should be clarified.
"and would go to a nearby café for replenishment" - I'm not sure replenishment is the right word in this context. Perhaps refreshment, or some such?
"Some of out local squabbles will probably..." - is out correct? Or is it just a typo or a sic in the quote? It just doesn't seem right.