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"and were considered title contenders until late into the campaign." - considered by whom?
This is more in reference to the fact that they were talked about as being "in the mix" so to speak. Tried to expand on this.
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"The gate receipts for the final had generated the club more than £23,000 in revenue, while unusual forms of income such as £40 from Columbia Records for the rights to sell recordings of the singing at the final further boosted the club." - repetition of "final" and "club"
"Ferguson added a brace during a 3â1 victory over Birmingham City on 17 September and was among the scorers a week later during another 3â1 victory over league leaders and reigning First Division champions Newcastle United," - repetition of "victory"
"The defeat was the first Newcastle had suffered during the season" - the word in bold is not needed
I'm not sure here, that would leave the sentence as "the first Newcastle had during the season" which doesn't read right to me?
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19:42, 29 October 2020 (UTC)reply
"The defeat was the first Newcastle had suffered during the season and moved Cardiff into second place, with The Times picking Keenor out for praise in restricting the play of Newcastle's leading forward Hughie Gallacher." - repetition of "Newcastle"
"Crowd numbers had initially remained high at the start of the season as the team's FA Cup success peaked interest, but numbers dropped as the season progressed" - repetition of "season"
"The latter match was played in driving snow as Everton dominated the match with Dixie Dean scoring both of the opposition goals." - repetition of "match"
"despite being under pressure for long spells in the game, held out until conceding the only goal of the game shortly before the final whistle." - repetition of "game"
"Stewart made several signings from non-league sides to compensate for the sales, with Matt Robinson, Tom Helsby, William Roberts and Francis Harris all arriving by the end of the season, although none featured for the senior side during the campaign." - repetition of "side"
"Although the sixth-place finish during the campaign was the club's highest finish in the First Division since the 1923â24 season, the 1927â28 season is generally regarded as the start of the club's downfall" - repetition of "club" and "season"
"The failure to replace first team players with sufficient quality and an ageing core of the squad are both cited as factors in the club's eventual downturn." - cited by whom?
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MWright96: Thanks for the review. I've addressed all of the points above. One or two minor comments above but the most have been implemented. Let me know what you think, cheers.
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19:42, 29 October 2020 (UTC)reply