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02:49, 13 January 2021 (UTC)
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The
BBFC reference isn't working for me.
Fixed
Chompy Ace
01:49, 14 January 2021 (UTC)
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The
reference used for the countries that made the film also lists India and Spain.
Fixed changed reference to
The Numbers , only to have UK and US
Chompy Ace
01:59, 14 January 2021 (UTC)
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The double use of the name Mendes in the first sentence seems repetitive. I suggest rewording it or changing part to "produced by Sam Mendes, who co-wrote the film with..."
Done
Chompy Ace
23:55, 13 January 2021 (UTC)
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Done
Chompy Ace
23:55, 13 January 2021 (UTC)
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The last two sentences in the first paragraph seem vague. No reason why the names of both soldiers can't be mentioned, along with the names of the actors that played them. Additionally, it doesn't sound good when two consecutive sentences end with the same word, this time it being the word "attack".
Fixed sentence, with the last sentence in the first paragraph removed
Chompy Ace
23:59, 13 January 2021 (UTC)
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"rest of the cast the following" --> "rest of the cast joining the following"
Done
Chompy Ace
23:56, 13 January 2021 (UTC)
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No problems with the final paragraph.
Done
Chompy Ace
23:56, 13 January 2021 (UTC)
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Something about the lead just doesn't feel right. It goes from who made the film, to who's in it, and then to what it's based on. The entire paragraph should be reworded, and this might be a stretch, but here's an example of how it should be (from who made it, to what it's based on, and then , to whose in it):
1917 is a 2019 British
war film directed and produced by
Sam Mendes , who co-wrote the film with
Krysty Wilson-Cairns . Partially inspired by stories told to Mendes by his paternal grandfather
Alfred about his service during
World War I , the film takes place after the German retreat to the
Hindenburg Line during
Operation Alberich , and follows two British soldiers, Will Schofield (
George MacKay ) and Tom Blake (
Dean-Charles Chapman ), who are ordered to deliver a message calling off a doomed offensive attack.
Mark Strong ,
Andrew Scott ,
Richard Madden , Claire Duburcq,
Colin Firth , and
Benedict Cumberbatch also star in supporting roles.
Done
Chompy Ace
13:42, 14 January 2021 (UTC)
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Don't forget to re-add the reference after "World War I".
Done
Chompy Ace
13:57, 14 January 2021 (UTC)
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This section is 556 words, so no problems with
WP:FILMPLOT .
Done
Chompy Ace
23:54, 13 January 2021 (UTC)
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Remove the comma after "consciousness at night".
Done
Chompy Ace
23:53, 13 January 2021 (UTC)
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Done
Chompy Ace
23:59, 13 January 2021 (UTC)
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Instead of being vague, mention that Amblin Partners and New Republic Pictures acquired the project on 18 June 2018.
Done
Chompy Ace
14:54, 14 January 2021 (UTC)
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Remove the comma after "directing".
Done
Chompy Ace
14:52, 14 January 2021 (UTC)
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"The same month" --> "That same month"
Done
Chompy Ace
14:52, 14 January 2021 (UTC)
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"the project in 18 June 2018" --> "the project on 18 June 2018"
Done
Chompy Ace
14:59, 14 January 2021 (UTC)
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A lot of quoting in this section, so try shortening them.
Done
Chompy Ace
22:47, 14 January 2021 (UTC)
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Fixed
Chompy Ace
22:32, 14 January 2021 (UTC)
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The first and second references after "Shepperton Studios" are dead.
Fixed
Chompy Ace
14:57, 14 January 2021 (UTC)
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None of the references used say that filming started on 1 April. Luckily, I found
one that does .
Done
Chompy Ace
22:40, 14 January 2021 (UTC)
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This one-sentence section feels short. Try expanding it by mentioning how the soundtrack was made, and/or, some specific music created for the trailer/promotions/film.
Done The standalone soundtrack article for the film is not notable, as
WP:RSP shows Amazon unreliable, so moving the entire soundtrack text to the film's subsection itself.
Chompy Ace
22:13, 14 January 2021 (UTC)
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Make this its own section.
Done
Chompy Ace
02:11, 15 January 2021 (UTC)
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Combine the first three sentences in this section into one paragraph.
Done
Chompy Ace
22:14, 14 January 2021 (UTC)
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"at the 2019 Royal Film Performance" --> "at the 2019 Royal Film Performance in London"
Done
Chompy Ace
22:15, 14 January 2021 (UTC)
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Done reworded
Chompy Ace
22:21, 14 January 2021 (UTC)
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Shouldn't "$225,679,098" be rounded to "$225.7 million", rather than "$225.6 million"?
Done
Chompy Ace
02:13, 15 January 2021 (UTC)
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"$384.8 million" --> "$384.9 million". Additionally, change the numbers in the infobox and lead to "$384.9 million" rather than "$384.6" or "$384".
Done
Chompy Ace
02:13, 15 January 2021 (UTC)
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This
reference also doesn't mention the "11 venues".
Fixed
Chompy Ace
02:20, 15 January 2021 (UTC)
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This
reference says the film finished 3rd in its second weekend of wide release, behind Bad Boys for Life and Dolittle , not 2nd.
Fixed
Chompy Ace
02:20, 15 January 2021 (UTC)
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Fixed
Chompy Ace
02:20, 15 January 2021 (UTC)
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"During the weekend of the Academy Awards, the film made $9.2 million" --> "During the four-day-weekend of the Academy Awards, the film made
$9.3 million ".
Done
Chompy Ace
02:17, 15 January 2021 (UTC)
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"finishing third behind newcomer Bad Boys for Life " --> "finishing third behind Bad Boys for Life and Dolittle " or simply "finishing third."
Done
Chompy Ace
21:21, 15 January 2021 (UTC)
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The average grade from "CinemaScore" needs a reference.
Nevermind, a user had removed the reference. I have reverted their edits.
Already done per consistency with other film articles;
Once Upon a Time in Hollywood#Critical response and
The Fate of the Furious#Critical response are the examples.
Chompy Ace
21:43, 15 January 2021 (UTC)
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This part of the Times quote, "...and the major accomplishment of 1917 , the latest film to join the canon, may be that its makers figured out what the generals could not: a way to advance" is not in
this reference .
Done removed
Chompy Ace
21:35, 15 January 2021 (UTC)
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"war picture... that turns" --> "war picture [...] that turns"
Done
Chompy Ace
21:36, 15 January 2021 (UTC)
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The reference for the Oscars and Critics' Choice Awards should be verdicts, not simply lists of nominations.
Done
Chompy Ace
21:54, 15 January 2021 (UTC)
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Everything else looks good.
Done
Chompy Ace
21:54, 15 January 2021 (UTC)
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The fact that the operation took place from "9 February and 20 March 1917" needs a reference.
Done
Chompy Ace
23:46, 15 January 2021 (UTC)
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"was manned... As for" --> "was manned [...] As for" or "was manned. As for"
Done
Chompy Ace
23:28, 15 January 2021 (UTC)
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The first sentence of the last paragraph in this section needs a reference.
Done removed sentence
Chompy Ace
23:35, 15 January 2021 (UTC)
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The sentence starting with "The 2nd Devonshire Regiment was never brigaded" needs a reference.
Done removed
Chompy Ace
23:39, 15 January 2021 (UTC)
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Fixed
I have changed from url-status to url-access
Chompy Ace
23:38, 15 January 2021 (UTC)
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The reference with the "failed verification tag" should be fixed.
Done reworded
Chompy Ace
23:49, 15 January 2021 (UTC)
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Archive all archivable citations.
Done
Chompy Ace
01:49, 14 January 2021 (UTC)
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Link and archive
this website in the reference titled "Mendes epic is a personal battle".
Done
Chompy Ace
22:25, 14 January 2021 (UTC)
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There are two references titled "Lives Under Siege: The Goldfinch and 1917". Use "ref name" to fix this.
Done
Chompy Ace
02:16, 15 January 2021 (UTC)
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