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Reviewer: Hurricanehink ( talk · contribs) 18:51, 4 March 2014 (UTC)
I guess I'll review this since you reviewed mine :)
- "The first system, Hurricane One," - since "Hurricane One" isn't really a name, I don't think you need to mention it here.
- Removed-- 12george1 ( talk) 19:31, 4 March 2014 (UTC)
- Why do you mention knots in the lede with regards to ACE?
- Removed-- 12george1 ( talk) 19:31, 4 March 2014 (UTC)
- You should mention H1's extratropical history lasting until September 10
- Done-- 12george1 ( talk) 19:31, 4 March 2014 (UTC)
- You say that H1's rough seas capsized the ship in the lede, but don't mention it in the section. Why not?
- It is mention in the section. "The crew of the barkentine St. Peter reported that another ship capsized with 45 men aboard; all of them drowned.[4][5]"-- 12george1 ( talk) 19:31, 4 March 2014 (UTC)
- "No impact was reported in the Florida Keys." - source?
- Fixed-- 12george1 ( talk) 04:46, 5 March 2014 (UTC)
- New England impact for TS 3?
- Couldn't find anything for New England. :( -- 12george1 ( talk) 19:31, 4 March 2014 (UTC)
- TS 4 caused some deaths per NHC
- Ok, but what should I do? There isn't a specific total mentioned.-- 12george1 ( talk) 19:31, 4 March 2014 (UTC)
- More info about the Triton here, including survivors. The captain apparently committed suicide when he heard the ship was sinking. Here is a list of news sources from October 1897 containing "Triton"
- Fixed-- 12george1 ( talk) 04:46, 5 March 2014 (UTC)
- "The system weakened while crossing the island" - say Cuba here since it's a new paragraph
- Fixed-- 12george1 ( talk) 04:46, 5 March 2014 (UTC)
- Any reason you didn't use the Monthly Weather Review? It has some more info on storms five and six
- Better?-- 12george1 ( talk) 04:46, 5 March 2014 (UTC)
The writing is generally decent, but I think it's a little lacking on the comprehensive front. Fix these and I'll be happy to pass. ♫ Hurricanehink ( talk) 18:51, 4 March 2014 (UTC)